Tuesday, May 13, 2008

Poem: Free at Last?

Free at Last?
Free at last!
We won the war,
Got the rights
But something is missing,
Something BIG

Free at last.
But what does it mean to be free?
No respect,
No families
This is not freedom!

Free at last?
No money,
No job...
Is this really freedom?

2 comments:

Ms. Sackstein said...

The sentiment of the poem is good, but I'd like to see you use more poetic devices to make this poem more successful.

Yeojin Seong said...

There is a revised poem. Check the post above called "revised poem".